Trifextra 32 / Zombie Bunnies – The Setting Sun

In this weekend’s challenge, we are given 33 words and told to add 33 more.

Sound familiar? Yes, this prompt took me back to where it all began, so so why not use the opportunity to take the story a little further. Just a little.

TFX’s words are in italics, my words are bolded.
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The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction. She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.

Carly looked past the cracked window as Allen walked into the sunset alone. One way or another, he was gone. She turned so the camera wouldn’t see the tear. The show was over.

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21 responses to “Trifextra 32 / Zombie Bunnies – The Setting Sun

  1. awwwww….so sad. I love your take on it. A move? Well done!
    Mine is here
    Have you an AWESOME WEEKEND!
    hugs
    shakira

  2. Great take on the prompt. Read the older story too :)

  3. Awww! A very emotional ending.

  4. This is a perfect ending. And the cracked window is a perfect detail. Nicely done!

  5. “She turned so the camera wouldn’t see the tear. The show was over.” Love it. Great job, BT.

  6. Gina

    “The show was over” makes me sad! I HATE goodbyes!

  7. Aw. I’m looking forward to the elaboration in the next installment!

  8. Such a sad moment. I hope you don’t wait so long between installments :)

  9. Wow this is was so great! :D Really powerful piece of writing :D

  10. “The show was over.” Does that mean that the cameras will be off of them at last and they have no more need to hide their true selves?

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